tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-98540505315501299.post3053772533784313302..comments2023-05-14T04:51:05.612-07:00Comments on The Land of Renolia: Chapter Three (Heather)Timhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00282969790552641742noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-98540505315501299.post-85853643737246947222012-06-30T18:05:14.980-07:002012-06-30T18:05:14.980-07:00I like how you had character conflict in the dialo...I like how you had character conflict in the dialogue. Maybe you could add more realism by adding comments about how Tim's parents reacted his disappearances for magic training or if they noticed the clone-bit.Galadrielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12993204559713347090noreply@blogger.com